Perhaps some mroe about them, to better draw a picture of their scoeity:Īs far as humans can go, they have a perfect soceity. "With all that's left of Edens might" (to focus on the fact that she is the last) or perhaps "With all the Sum of Edens might" (she has/is the best stuff they ever created) I'd like to keep the "in" in the 1st strophe, so "In Vulcan's day, in Nox's night". The designation as "Eden's Knight" was only because I needed something Rhyming to Night/replacing Might in the last strophe, so it doesn't needs to be in there. Smites those who threaten innocent lives! Second line needs work, doesn't really roll off the tongue. It worked for Robert Frost, in this case not so much. Not really wild about the AABA rhyme scheme. : Erebus, Nyx (or Nox), Hecate, nothing approperate comes to mind Humm' date=' : Lucifer, Auora, Ra, Apollo, but to fit the meter should be two syllables. While the "night" planet should imply a really dark place, maybe even on in perpetual night.īoth could be moons (as this might allow for pertual "onesidedness" easily). The "day" planets/bodies name should be one that implies a very birght world, perhaps even one with perpetual day. Since that is a new star system, we are not limited to the names used in our solar system. I would like these names to be founded in Earth Mythology.
I would like this to be names of plantes/celestial bodies in the new systme. The parts I need help with are what I marked as Missing 1 and Missing 2. So here is what I got so far about their military/hero oath:
Green lantern oath rhyme scheme how to#
Then they find out how to send a single person back trhough time and space, to prevent WW 3 and thus their own civilisation from ever comming to pass (and saving a few billion lives + following generations in the process). The basic story is that humanity (or whats left of it after 2 additional world wars and two planetary exody, we talk about 10 thousand lives) settles in a distant system, on a Planet called "New Eden". I have a character that is somewhat similar elements and I really like the oath, so I wanted to adapt it.
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